Rhythms, some word play, and mostly cliched metaphors, but more (loosely) prosey in tone and style, and more cliched than great poems?
(Line divisions by themselves don’t automatically = good/great poetry.)
Is there anything editable about it, as is? (A young person’s piece, for sure: cliches.)
Would the whole piece have been more effective organized in stanzas?
Very few famous long single-stanza-ed pieces work. Even “Tintern Abbey” could have had more stanzas for changing moods and sections of thought.
*N.B. BTW/ I have no problems with the content or the context yesterday or her delivery–all fine feelings, well-timed, and speaking relevantly to the event.
She made a +ve contribution to the inauguration and represented youth, a forgotten quarter of the election and country.